Kia ora, I am a student at St Francis of Assisi School, Welcome - Haere Mai. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note my work may include spelling or other errors because some of it will be my first drafts. I would like to get your feedback - comments, thoughts, questions and ideas to help me Learn Create Share.
Pages
Wednesday, August 25, 2021
School should not banned junk food
2 comments:
To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - Begin with a greeting. Talk about something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A comment that will mean something to me to let me know you read/watched or listened to what I had to say. - use any language.
3. Something helpful - Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
Encourage me to make another post
Hi Bella,
ReplyDeleteThanks for posting your writing on the blog!
I don’t think I agree with you regarding junk food in lunches at school!! Sure, it gives you some energy (sometimes too much) but then you come crashing down. Maybe you could limit the number of junk food items per student per day? What do you think? What treats would you have in your lunchbox?
Hi Bella,
ReplyDeleteYou have made a great start on this piece of writing. I like your question at the end you might have a few different ideas from people about what they think.
It would be great if you made your writing into paragraphs. You could use the example on the Learn Create Share to help you. I would also love to see you add a couple more reasons as to why you think we should not ban junk food at school.
Keep up the good work!
Mrs Bryce